Becoming the writer I want to be

Already said in a DM, but these are all very good. I can see the improvement over time from where you started.

 

Hello everyone! How are you all doing? Finally back lmao.



I tried to be productive during my time away. I've started editing book 2 so I can send it to early readers. I also wrote a handful of haikus. Let me know what you think!

The sound of the rain.
Pitter-patter pitter-pat.
Beneath grey, pure blue.

Candyfloss saunters
across a burning ocean
turning dark and cold.

Trees without their leaves
spread their roots in ashen soil.
Skeletal remains.

As silver cascades
from Heaven high above us,
the thirsty plant smiles.

Cold against my ear,
frigid voices speak. They say,
"Summer's done for sure."

 

Thanks! I've seen myself improve too and now I make sure everything's 5-7-5 and it's taught me a lot about word choice and flow.

I love the first and third ones. I'm impressed with their imagery and it's inspiring me to try some new styles going forward. It's nice to see you back tho!

 

Thank you. It's good to be back.

 

All of them are great your doing well!
This one in particular I really like!

 

Up to 102 pages edited. Making good progress, with my goal being to send it off to early readers sometime next month.

 

I love this one too. I'm hoping to do more bird-themed ones this month and get an essence of the season.

 

I'm quite fond of bird ones myself.

Little birds feeding
Pohutukawa's nectar
Cheerfully dancing

Silver cloaked trees sway
Most bare yet one blossoming
Listen and be still

Seasons are changing
Leaves fall yet the tree still stands
Changing yet secure

The birds chirp and sing
They are content with no house
No worry or fear

The ants work non stop
Gathering with a purpose
They will dwell with peace

Go outside look up
You hold the keys to your chains
Fear is a liar

Many types of grass
Some tall some short some flower
Wonderfully designed

Do not fret or fear
Set your mind on something pure
Be at rest my soul

 

123 pages edited. Also wrote a haiku.

Streaks of white on blue.
Clouds painted across the sky.
Divine artistry.

 

I wrote one starting with "seasons may change" but this one's far superior. I love all of your haikus! You're talented (we all are) but have you thought of organizing a poetry book?

 

I like these. You should post this form of poetry more often.

 

I agree. Heck, I'd be happy if we three made a poetry book together, haha.

 

And I'm serious. If you two ever wanted to make a book of haikus with me, I won't turn down the invitation.

 

If you ever want a book of "There once was a man from Nantucket" poems I'm in.

 

xD

 

Yeah that would be a great idea! We should.

 

I really enjoy them. It was you who introduced me to haikus

 

Dont normally do any work weekends, but I decided to edit another chapter. 134 pages.

 

We should! I'm all for it as I'm sure we'd create something beautiful. I'm all ears for talking about it.

 

A bit of a cheeky, jazz haiku for you guys:

seasonal romances
are delightful, delirious,
or even de-lovely