Becoming the writer I want to be

Take a break and then write book 3!

 

873 words today. On track.

 

Realised I haven't shared any writing in a while. What do you guys think of this?


The group moved through the swamp at a slow pace, keeping to the water’s edge as best they could, occasionally creeping over hastily constructed platforms that, while placed recently, had already begun to turn to rust. All around them the swamp was noisy and alive, the sweltering air filled with the buzzing of hundreds of tiny gnats and the singing of long-legged insects, the thick green water sloshing and belching, families of rotund amphibious creatures with stern eyes resting on lily pads screaming up at the trees, the shaggy-feathered birds in said trees screaming right back. High above the trees curved a sky the colour of slate, greasy dark clouds moving listlessly across it as though they too were being drained of momentum by the stifling warmth.
(name redacted) looked up at the sky, watching the pale speck of white that was the far-off sun struggling to be visible. Then, she looked down and across the water, at a tuft of water reeds. Suddenly, the reeds rose into the open air to reveal the pallid beast they were attached to, the beast opening its single eyelid to study the party with a huge, bulging, muddy-orange eye that was crossed at the midsection by a narrow black slit.

 

Just working on some research notes today. Not a whole lot going on atm.

 

It makes me want to read your books!

 

It's very nice of you to say so. I definitely enjoy writing these alien planet descriptions quite a lot, and am getting better at them every time I write one I think. Eager to go back to book 1 at this rate and bring it up to book 2's higher standard.

 

Some more stuff,have less inspiration lately and still relapsing but i'll keep trying and praying God to help me

***
Dear God
Forgive me for all my sins
I have just got
The consequences of my idiosyncrasy
And I really need your help
I know I hated You
I know my faith's not well
But I'm just dying now I'm begging you
Don't know where else can I get a hand
This addiction has been getting to me
Past week couldn't fall asleep
Without feeling like a creep
Like a convict waiting
For his death sentence
As im about to fall the endless
Pit of self-hating essence
Sometimes I just want to end things
This is my repentance
If You're really one pulling the strings
Then give me strength to reach the entrance
Of the road to becoming a free man
And getting back my independence
Hope You can hear me.
Amen

***
Feeling poetic tonight
No matter how hard I try
I always end up losing the fight
Dopamine high, brain fried
Im gonna spend this black night
Like it's my last
and as I hit these walls
There's a tunnel in my sight
No matter how loud the darkness calls
I must follow the light

 

Wow. This was really good man. Thanks for sharing it. I'll pray for you too.
I read that prayer like a rap song. Have you heard of NF? He is a musician I think you'll quite like him. Look him up.

 

Thank for good words. Yeah the prayer was more like a freestyle, i just wrote it out

 

Now that I think about it, prayers arent supposed to be something poetic so I guess it works better that way

 

Actually I believe that poetry is the language of Angels. The bible is full of songs and passages that rhyme. Plus all the actual poems. Poetry is a language of love. And prayer is an expression of love so yes it's ok if it rhymes.
Keep writing. And don't throw anything away. File it away in a box because years later you'll want to read it and it mayake sense then.
I believe you need to write. Use much paper and write regardless of it it makes sense. Just get those thoughts out.
Most of all keep writing you are gifted.

 

964 words today.

 

I think I've found a haiku to submit for a contest @AtomicTango

 

Post it!

 

A field of flowers.
Soft breaths down from the mountains.
Petals on the breeze.

 

Well I hate to talk about something off topic but it seems sometimes like when I post anywhere but here I get no engagement, especially when I'm talking about something serious. Gonna link the thread I made and I would be grateful if any of you guys could reply to it. At the minute people are seeing it and not posting anything, kinda disheartening.

https://forum.nofap.com/index.php?threads/i-think-i-realised-what-i-get-out-of-femdom.311080/

 

You've seen it already. It's the hummingbird one haha. I really think that's one of my better ones and I'm gonna submit the revised one.

 

963 words.

 

1837 words today, much more than I expected to have to write but the chapter is done.

 

I've been reading "On Love and Barley" a Haiku book that collates some of the poetry of Basho. It's inspired me to write these Haiku myself.

Magpies in the grass,
watch out! Hidden in the bush
is a sneaky cat.

Ascend the mountain.
From the peak descend and then,
climb back up again.

Sat in the garden,
underneath the apple tree,
watching failing light.

Thoughts?